One hot,sticky, summer day in San Antonio, Texas; there was a fifteen year old boy and his family on spring break. This young, handsome boy's name was Ben. He had always wanted to go to San Antonio because of the diverse culture and amazing cuisine. What he did not know is that he would have one of the best vacations of his life.
The first night in San Antonio, Ben and his family went to a new barbecue place on the ever so famous River Walk. The food was fantastic, but it wasn't what Ben expected. He wanted more Mexican cuisine. The next day Ben's family went to a famous Mexican restaurant and he had tortilla soup because he had watched a movie on tortilla soup in Spanish class the week before. This was what Ben was looking for!
Ben's mom had booked this trip months in advance and did not know that the 2010 Women's Final Four was being held in San Antonio. Ben and his family are huge sports fans and they really wanted to go to the game. Eventually, they ended up going to the game. The seats were bad at first so Ben and his brother moved into a new seat in the second row at half court. It was the best chair in the house. I had a fantastic time and I will never forget my trip to San Antonio.
I think you used great detail in your story, especially the beginning when you said a hot, sticky, summer day. Only thing I would fix is you go from third person to first person.
ReplyDeleteFun story Ben...I want some tortilla soup now!
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